Hi Kat, 

Thank you for sharing your interests and your experiences. I really enjoyed the simplicity of your page! here are a few suggestions listed below, feel free to disregard them if they don't align with your vision. 

- Perhaps the artifact map can be a bit larger. I also added something similar to my page and I'm still working on how i can make it larger myself. 

- I think adding a learning goals section would be beneficial for the readers as they dive deep into your learning process, they'd keep them in mind.  

Thank you for sharing! 

Jasmine 

My apologies Dr Walsh; here is the revamped collection: https://portfolio.elab.athabascau.ca/user/3322458/artefact-1-v-2-1

Hi Kat,

It appears that you are missing the navigation bar which allows readers to move to your next page (artefact one); I am unable to move to that page.

Thank you, Kat

Pamela 

Hi Kat! Loved the artefact mind map. Very creative and unique. I'm inspired.

Hi Kat, great incorporation of the suggestions made thus far. Definitely makes for an easier read for the viewer/audience.

You should translate "Non progredi est regredi" - as everyone may not know what that means.

I think you should also read through one more time, as there are some grammatical changes that can be made for an easier read. For example, in my opinion, "I talked to my CEO about it, and he got so excited, that he gave me a hug and said the School will cover the costs, as it was so harmonious with my job" should read as: "I talked to my CEO about it and he got so excited that he gave me a hug and said the school will cover the costs, as it was so harmonious with my job." Just an overuse of commas.

You have a couple of references on this page, but I do not see the citations within the text.

I really like the mind map that you developed to demonstrate the artefacts that you chose. I think the mind map will be clearer if you add what each bubble represents to the left of each line beginning. 

Great job.

Ranveer

Thank you Emily! It looks a bit raw, but I hope I can figurre out how to format it better :)

Thank you Dr Walsh! I have changed the page according to your recommendations; I hope it looks better now. 

Hi Kat,

You have made an excellent start!

Here are my initial suggestions ( I will return to this page again). 

- Label this page as  Introduction

-Your initial learning goals for your program should be clearly visible to the reader. You may consider using bullet points for example. 

- Provide a brief overview (a short paragraph), on this page,  of why you choose your five artefacts as a group versus why you choose each individual artefact. You will explain what you chose each individual artefact on each of the five artefact pages that follow your introduction. 

Thank you,

Pamela 

Hi Kat! I really liked your choice to include a mind map to accompany your artifacts, as well as the external links to the main course descriptions. I also find your layout easy to read and I like your organization!